The extended essay I chose was by Daniel Gilmartin titled 'To what extent are digital design tools a threat to the modern day Illustrator and the value of Illustration'. I chose this because it links to my exploration of analogue and digital technologies although it was interesting to learn that his bibliography only contained Walter Benjamin in common to mine.
Quality of Research
- I thought that he had researched a lot of different things, many sources filling 2 pages
- The sources he had researched contained a range of books, films, blogs and websites
Line of Argument
- Theories were clearly divided into 2 chapters and had headings
- The introduction defined all of the key concepts and explained what they meant
- The clarity of each paragraph could have been more direct with an outlining sentence?
- I liked that the conclusion ended with a question however there were new quotes and points brought into it rather than just summarising the developed arguments and points
- The essay did answer and explore the statement in the title
Triangulation
- The was lots of big clumps of quotes which weren't refined or embedded within the paragraph
- There wasn't much paraphrasing
Tone of Voice
- The essay was written with very formal and academic language
- Lots of long sentences with lots of clauses
Linking
- The first chapter analysed information about 'the illustrator' and then the second chapter linked this back to aura and authenticity...broken down but also linked nicely
- The case studies were explained and explored but were also linked back to the theories explored in the first half of the essay
